T2+Narrative

T2 Narrative Writing

__Monday 4 July 2011__

Hi my name is Emma Black I am 13 years old and have brown hair with a few blonde steaks in it. I have green eyes and love fashion. I am kind, funny, loving, caring, happy, fun to be around and I like to save my money.I have a best friend named Anna Wright she is also 13 years old. She has curly blonde hair blue eyes and a great scene of style. Oh and she likes to spend her money!! I call Anna to see if she would like to go to the mall with me. “Hello Anna specking” “ Hi Anna it is Emma here I was just wondering if you would like to come to the mall with me today. My mum can take us there and pick us up with we have had enough” “Yes I would love to come. Just give me 10 minutes and I will come down to your place” “Ok cool see you soon bye” “ Cya bye” Once Anna got to my place we left. When we got to the mall we tell mum that we will text her when we have had enough and want to be picked up. About ten minutes into our day shopping our hands are already full with shopping bags and we see this really creepy man behind us and we don’t think much of it. We go into the next shop and when we come out the man is waiting outside we start walking faster and soo does the man.We turned around soon after and to man was still there following us around. Anna and I start to run towards the bathrooms and man is not far behind. Once we are in the bathroom I ask Anna “What is going on why the hell is this creep following us around?” “ I have NO idea and I am getting a little scared” Explained Anna “ Same here. Hopefully he will back off soon” Five minutes past, then ten. We sneak out of the bathroom and we don’t see the man any where until we turn the corner he backs us into a corner and says “ Give me all of your things” We scream really loud but no-one turned around to see what was going on. We suddenly made a split decision we bite the man on each arm and got away. We run as fast as we can to the security guards to tell them that here is a creepy man following us around. “ How long has he been following you girls around for?” Ask one of the female security guards “ About an hour. We didn’t think much of it at first” I told her. “ Ok... umm where was he the last time you saw him” “ Just around the corner about 5 minutes ago” “ Ok call your parents and get them to pick you up. I will get some other officers to try and find his man. You to please stay here until your parents come” Explained the security guard. When we got back to my place Anna called her mum to tell her what had happened and also asked if she could stay the night. After dinner, Anna and I we to bed and talked “That was soo scary, today aye” I groaned “ Yeah I’d say. That man was really creepy as well. I wonder if they found him?” “ Yeah I wonder. Hey what did your mum say when you called her?” “ Umm she didn’t really say that much, I think she was in shock. But she did say that she doesn’t think we will be aloud to go back there again in a while” “ I don’t think I wound want to go back anyway” Before Anna could say another word Mum came in and hold us that the security guards had rang to say they had found the guy and that he will be in jail for a while and would give us $250 each. I was soo glade that he won’t be bothering us again and that we get money from him. “ Hey Mum when can we go and spend that money?” “ Ha ha ha no hurry” Mum laughed “ Go to sleep now ok it is getting late” “ Goodnight mum see you in the morning” Me and Anna talk for a little long then say goodnight to each other and place our heads onto our pillows, close our eyes and go to sleep.

__Tuesday 28 June 2011__

**Comment: Thanks Sophie, your story follows a clear sequence of events and I'm glad they caught the man in the end.**

**(Working towards Level 4)** **Next Steps - Target** **1. Show some thoughtful selection of words (description) throughout story to develop characters, setting and events (as discussed). Put a picture in the readers mind about what is happening, could you draw it?** **2. Use correct punctuation when using dialogue**

Hi my name is Emma Black I am 13 years old and have brown hair with a few blonde steaks in it. I have green eyes and love fashion. I am kind, funny, loving, caring, happy, fun to be around and I like to save my money.I have a best friend named Anna Wright she is also 13 years old. She has curly blonde hair blue eyes and a great scene of style. Oh and she likes to spend her money!! I call Anna to see if she would like to go to the mall with me. “Hello Anna specking” “ Hi Anna it is Emma here I was just wondering if you would like to come to the mall with me today. My mum can take us there and pick us up with we have had enough” “Yes I would love to come. Just give me 10 minutes and I will come down to your place” “Ok cool see you soon bye” “ Cya bye” Once Anna got to my place we left. When we got to the mall we tell mum that we will text her when we have had enough and want to be picked up. About ten minutes into our day shopping our hands are already full with shopping bags and we see this really creepy man behind us and we don’t think much of it. We go into the next shop and when we come out the man is waiting outside we start walking faster and soo does the man.We turned around soon after and to man was still there following us around. Anna and I start to run towards the bathrooms and man is not far behind. Once we are in the bathroom I ask Anna “What is going on why the hell is this creep following us around?” “ I have NO idea and I am getting a little scared” Explained Anna “ Same here. Hopefully he will back off soon” Five minutes past, then ten. We sneak out of the bathroom and we don’t see the man any where until we turn the corner he backs us into a corner and says “ Give me all of your things” We scream really loud but no-one turned around to see what was going on. We suddenly made a split decision we bite the man on each arm and got away. We run as fast as we can to the security guards to tell them that here is a creepy man following us around. “ How long has he been following you girls around for?” Ask one of the female security guards “ About an hour. We didn’t think much of it at first” I told her. “ Ok... umm where was he the last time you saw him” “ Just around the corner about 5 minutes ago” “ Ok call your parents and get them to pick you up. I will get some other officers to try and find his man. You to please stay here until your parents come” Explained the security guard.

When we got back to my place Anna called her mum to tell her what had happened and also asked if she could stay the night.

After dinner, Anna and I we to bed and talked “That was soo scary, today aye” I groaned “ Year I’d say. That man was really creepy as well. I wonder if they found him?” “ Year I wonder. Hey what did your mum say when you called her?” “ Umm she didn’t really say that much, I think she was in shock. But she did say that she doesn’t think we will be aloud to go back there again in a while” “ I don’t think I wound want to go back anyway”

Before Anna could say another word Mum came in and hold us that the security guards had rang to say they had found the guy and that he will be in jail for a while and would give us $250 each.

I was soo glade that he won’t be bothering us again and that we get money from him.

“ Hey Mum when can we go and spend that money?” “ Ha ha ha no hurry” Mum laughed “ Go to sleep now ok it is getting late” “ Goodnight mum see you in the morning”

Me and Anna talk for a little long then say goodnight to each other and place our heads onto our pillows, close our eyes and go to sleep.

__Tuesday 21 June 2011__

Hi my name is Emma Black I am 13 years old and have brown hair with a few blonde steaks in it. I have green eyes and love fashion. I also like to save my money. I have a best friend named Anna Wright she is also 13 years old. She has curly blonde hair blue eyes and a great scene of style. Oh and she likes to spend her money!!

I call Anna to see if she would like to go to the mall with me. “Hello Anna specking” “ Hi Anna it is Emma here I was just wondering if you would like to come to the mall with me today. My mum can take us there and pick us up with we have had enough” “Yes I would love to come. Just give me 10 minutes and I will come down to your place” “Ok cool see you soon bye” “ Cya bye”

Once Anna is over at my place we leave. When we got to the mall we tell mum that we will text her when we have had enough and want to be picked up.

About ten minutes into our day shopping our hands are already full with shopping bags and we see this really creepy man behind us and we don’t think much of it. We go into the next shop and when we come out the man is waiting outside we start walking faster and soo does the man.

We turned around soon after and to man was still there following us around. Anna and I start to run towards the bathrooms and man is not far behind. Once we are in the bathroom I ask Anna .... “What is going on why the hell is this creep following us around?” “ I have NO idea and I am getting a little scared” Explained Anna “ Same here. Hopefully he will back off soon”

Five minutes past, then ten. We sneak out of the bathroom and we don’t see the man any where until we turn the corner he backs us into a corner and says “ Give me all of your things” We scream and sworm like a worm and we get away. We run as fast as we can to the security guards to tell them that here is a creepy man following us around. “ How long has he been following you girls around for?” Ask one of the female security guards “ About an hour. We didn’t think much of it at first” I told her.”